man

Winter shares a room with three other Seasons
The Moon and the Sun breathe the same Air
The Forests embrace the Rain
The Flowers don’t need to impress each other
The Wind moves the Dirt
The Ocean kisses the Sky and meets the Sand

And then there is man…

Who wants his Land and won’t share
Who doesn’t like getting stuck in the Rain
Thinks he’s more superior than the next man
A man-kind of pollution that poisons the Air and litters the Earth
Who swims in the Ocean and walks on the Sand
Who are we to think we can?

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9 Comments so far

  1.   Prudence on October 29th, 2011

    I love the imagery….I like the imagry about man wanting land…it speaks to me. I think about things like that all the time.

  2.   erin on October 30th, 2011

    hey, this is one badass poem. i loved everything about it. at first with the title of “man” i was curious where or why or whats gonna happen here. then the first part with the positive and beautiful natural imagery was so refreshing. but man, humans, have to come and ruin it. this was really a statement and i really loved it. big fan.

  3.   samantha on October 30th, 2011

    Thank you =)

  4.   margarita on October 31st, 2011

    Wow samantha, your poem puts into words exactly how i feel about mankind some of the time. The imagery of nature is so beautiful and its a mazing how these elements can co-exist. And then theres man, people – power hungry, greedy and never satisfied; how sad.

  5.   michelle on October 31st, 2011

    Hats off to you, for such great imagery. Your poem was filled with so imagery, that while reading your poem, i could picture the imagines in my head.
    Wonderful job, especially with the imaginery 🙂

  6.   cwilkerson on October 31st, 2011

    “Yeah, well, you know, that’s just, like, your opinion, man.” -the dude
    man.. that word alone always makes me think of the dude.
    your perspective on the duality of nature and humans is interesting.
    the only thing that stands apart with the environment is the “ocean kisses the sky” only visually, not physically.. i like that.. i personally see the ocean to mirror the sky, because of their weather interactions with each other and the ability for the surface of the water to reflect that above it and conceal what is below. the generalization of the world as so giving and man as so selfish destructive is also an interesting perspective, but can also be quite the opposite such as recent surges of natural disasters and trends in renewable efforts. we (human and earth) both give and take.

  7.   samantha on October 31st, 2011

    The Big Lebowski! haha I have no idea why my poem made you think of the dude but that’s cool. Yeah, I could have said the ocean reflects the sky but it wouldn’t have sounded as effective. I definitely agree that nature is not always innocent, but it’s our foundation and the reason we’re here. Im happy you liked my poem. Thanks everyone!

  8.   Richard on November 1st, 2011

    Hey samantha, I just want you to know you that you have a lot of skill. You are a great poet and you fill your poems with tons of imagery. Not just this one. And if there is one thing I cant get enough of of, its imagery. You have a way about you, you see things from a very…cool lens. Like a kaleidoscope sort of. Of words. Keep writing and we’ll keep reading.

  9.   jenny abeles on November 1st, 2011

    hi samantha. the structure of this poem is very satisfying. Like Rossetti’s “Song,” you pose one scenario in the first stanza (strophe) and then contrast it in the second stanza (antistrophe). It’s an effective way of showing variance, but, as Candice suggested, the danger is that the relationship shown might seem too patently opposite, losing some of the subtleties of each subject. Your comparison of humanity as at odds with a harmonious natural world is apt and socially relevant, and I happen to share the frustration with us that you describe. Still, nature is no all sweetness and light, and the last thing you want to in this poem is underestimate it. how much more effective would it be to describe the parts of nature that are “red in tooth and claw,” as tennyson says, but show how even so, these components nonetheless still work in a harmonious system grand enough to accommodate them?

    Winter shares a room with three other Seasons
    gorgeous line!

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